Speaking Feedback Date: October 15th, 2016 Speaker: Dawon Park Evaluator: Sohee Lee Title: Bike riding
1.The general purpose of the speech was clear. The general purpose of her speech was to inform the audience about simple pleasures of riding. It was clear throughout the whole speech.
2.The specific purpose of the speech was clear. Her explanation was brief and easy to comprehend the specific purpose of the speech, which was to inform the audience about benefits and pleasures of bike riding. I got more interested in bike riding after listening to her speech. It also helped me recall my old days of bike riding.
3.The speech organization supported the speech’s specific purpose. Her speech was well organized. She had a definite opening, body, and conclusion. I was able to clearly identify the main points of her speech. She first started with a question, then moved on to an anecdote and then explained about benefits of bike riding.
4.The main points and supporting material contributed to the speech’s specific purpose. Her speech was well organized and I was able to clearly identify the main points of her speech. In the latter part of her speech, she stated that she hoped the audience will feel the simple pleasures of bike riding after listening to her speech. She also suggested renting a bike for those who are worried because they don’t own a bike.
5.The beginning, body, and conclusion reinforced the specific purpose. She started by asking a question, “How many of you here do not know how to ride a bike?” for those of you who do know how to ride a bike, when was the last time you went bike riding?” Next, she moved on to her own story of riding a bike when she was little. After describing her story of bike riding, she talked about many benefits of riding a bike. One of the benefits was improving health. She used facts to explain them. She also used a quote while explaining the pleasures of bike riding. She ended her speech by saying “What are you waiting for? Let’s get up and go ride bikes.
6.The speaker achieved the specific purpose. Through talking about her own story of riding a bike, benefits of riding bikes, and stating a quote related to the topic, she acheieved the specific purposse.
7.The speaker appeared confident and sincere, with minimal nervousness. Her tone was good and she spoke audibly with confidence. The pace of her speech was adequate enough. She spoke clearly and audibly. She also made appropriate pauses, which helped me follow her speech better.
8.The speaker did not rely on notes throughout the speech. At first, she spoke without referring to the notes, but as she moved on, she seemed to refer her notes. However, I could see that she tried to make eye contact with the audience throughout her speech.
9.What could the speaker have done differently to make the speech more effective? It would have been better if she had made her speech flow smoothly. In the middle part of her speech, she seemed to stammer a bit as she tried not to use notes. Also, it would have been better if she used more body gestures while delivering her speech. It will make her deliverance better and get the audience more focused.
10.What did you like about the presentation? I liked the overall content and how she organized her speech. She started her speech by asking questions such as “How many of you here do not know how to ride a bike?” and “For those of you who do know how to ride a bike, when was the last time you rode a bike?” After asking questions to get the audience more interested to the topic, she moved on to her story of riding a bike when she was little. It was interesting enough to get me more interested to the topic. Then she explained about several benefits of bike riding based on scientific facts. Also, I liked how she stated her purpose of her speech. Furthermore, I liked how she ended her speech by saying, “What are you waiting for? Let’s get up and go ride bikes.”
Title: Bike Riding Evaluator: Dawon Park (Self Evaluation) Date: October 16th ● The general purpose of the speech was clear.1 I believe that the general purpose of my speech was clear enough so that the listeners were informed about the merits of bike-riding and were inspired to go ride a bike.
● The specific purpose of the speech was clear.1 I think the specific purpose of my speech was clear so that the audience will be impressed by the advantages of riding bikes and will want to go learn/ ride bikes.
● The speech organization supported the speech's specific purpose.1 I think starting with an attention-getter question, and then telling an anecdote of my experience of learning how to ride a bike, explaining the merits of bike riding and encouraging the audience to go riding helped support the specific purpose of my speech.
● The main points and supporting material contributed to the speech's specific purpose.1 The advantages of bike riding well contributed to the speech’s specific purpose. It might have been better if I added some more explanation to the part describing the different types of bikes and maybe I could have used ppt slides to support, but I don’t think it was too much necessary.
● The beginning, body and conclusion reinforced the specific purpose.1 I believe the beginning, body, and conclusion all stayed on topic, and restating the benefits of riding bikes in the conclusion helped reinforce the specific purpose more.
● The speaker achieved the specific purpose.1 I think after listening to my speech, the audience should be able to list the major merits of riding a bike and feel the importance of riding. Also, I believe they will be able to feel the urge to go bike riding or learn, and think about when the last time they went riding was.
● The speaker appeared confident and sincere, with minimal nervousness.4 I was very nervous and started to lose confidence though my speech. I also stammered often and it needs improving.
● The speaker did not rely on notes throughout the speech.3 Even though I memorized the whole speech when practicing, my head went blank when I stood in front of an audience. I seemed to gradually refer to my notes as I moved on.
● What could the speaker have done differently to make the speech more effective? I should have used hand gestures to make my speech more conveyable. I will have to try practicing in front of someone to get used to an audience which will help not to forget my words. I could use a louder voice and put more enthusiasm into the tone.
● What did you like about the presentation? I liked the organization of the speech and I believe the content was easy to understand. The anecdote of my experience when I was little helped in making the presentation interesting. I also liked the quote of John F. Kennedy, I think it was closely related to the whole topic of my speech.
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ReplyDeleteDate: October 15th, 2016
Speaker: Dawon Park
Evaluator: Sohee Lee
Title: Bike riding
1.The general purpose of the speech was clear.
The general purpose of her speech was to inform the audience about simple pleasures of riding. It was clear throughout the whole speech.
2.The specific purpose of the speech was clear.
Her explanation was brief and easy to comprehend the specific purpose of the speech, which was to inform the audience about benefits and pleasures of bike riding. I got more interested in bike riding after listening to her speech. It also helped me recall my old days of bike riding.
3.The speech organization supported the speech’s specific purpose.
Her speech was well organized. She had a definite opening, body, and conclusion. I was able to clearly identify the main points of her speech. She first started with a question, then moved on to an anecdote and then explained about benefits of bike riding.
4.The main points and supporting material contributed to the speech’s specific purpose.
Her speech was well organized and I was able to clearly identify the main points of her speech. In the latter part of her speech, she stated that she hoped the audience will feel the simple pleasures of bike riding after listening to her speech. She also suggested renting a bike for those who are worried because they don’t own a bike.
5.The beginning, body, and conclusion reinforced the specific purpose.
She started by asking a question, “How many of you here do not know how to ride a bike?” for those of you who do know how to ride a bike, when was the last time you went bike riding?” Next, she moved on to her own story of riding a bike when she was little. After describing her story of bike riding, she talked about many benefits of riding a bike. One of the benefits was improving health. She used facts to explain them. She also used a quote while explaining the pleasures of bike riding. She ended her speech by saying “What are you waiting for? Let’s get up and go ride bikes.
6.The speaker achieved the specific purpose.
Through talking about her own story of riding a bike, benefits of riding bikes, and stating a quote related to the topic, she acheieved the specific purposse.
7.The speaker appeared confident and sincere, with minimal nervousness.
Her tone was good and she spoke audibly with confidence. The pace of her speech was adequate enough. She spoke clearly and audibly. She also made appropriate pauses, which helped me follow her speech better.
8.The speaker did not rely on notes throughout the speech.
At first, she spoke without referring to the notes, but as she moved on, she seemed to refer her notes. However, I could see that she tried to make eye contact with the audience throughout her speech.
9.What could the speaker have done differently to make the speech more effective?
It would have been better if she had made her speech flow smoothly. In the middle part of her speech, she seemed to stammer a bit as she tried not to use notes. Also, it would have been better if she used more body gestures while delivering her speech. It will make her deliverance better and get the audience more focused.
10.What did you like about the presentation?
I liked the overall content and how she organized her speech. She started her speech by asking questions such as “How many of you here do not know how to ride a bike?” and “For those of you who do know how to ride a bike, when was the last time you rode a bike?” After asking questions to get the audience more interested to the topic, she moved on to her story of riding a bike when she was little. It was interesting enough to get me more interested to the topic. Then she explained about several benefits of bike riding based on scientific facts. Also, I liked how she stated her purpose of her speech. Furthermore, I liked how she ended her speech by saying, “What are you waiting for? Let’s get up and go ride bikes.”
Title: Bike Riding
ReplyDeleteEvaluator: Dawon Park (Self Evaluation)
Date: October 16th
● The general purpose of the speech was clear.1
I believe that the general purpose of my speech was clear enough so that the listeners were informed about the merits of bike-riding and were inspired to go ride a bike.
● The specific purpose of the speech was clear.1
I think the specific purpose of my speech was clear so that the audience will be impressed by the advantages of riding bikes and will want to go learn/ ride bikes.
● The speech organization supported the speech's specific purpose.1
I think starting with an attention-getter question, and then telling an anecdote of my experience of learning how to ride a bike, explaining the merits of bike riding and encouraging the audience to go riding helped support the specific purpose of my speech.
● The main points and supporting material contributed to the speech's specific purpose.1
The advantages of bike riding well contributed to the speech’s specific purpose. It might have been better if I added some more explanation to the part describing the different types of bikes and maybe I could have used ppt slides to support, but I don’t think it was too much necessary.
● The beginning, body and conclusion reinforced the specific purpose.1
I believe the beginning, body, and conclusion all stayed on topic, and restating the benefits of riding bikes in the conclusion helped reinforce the specific purpose more.
● The speaker achieved the specific purpose.1
I think after listening to my speech, the audience should be able to list the major merits of riding a bike and feel the importance of riding. Also, I believe they will be able to feel the urge to go bike riding or learn, and think about when the last time they went riding was.
● The speaker appeared confident and sincere, with minimal nervousness.4
I was very nervous and started to lose confidence though my speech. I also stammered often and it needs improving.
● The speaker did not rely on notes throughout the speech.3
Even though I memorized the whole speech when practicing, my head went blank when I stood in front of an audience. I seemed to gradually refer to my notes as I moved on.
● What could the speaker have done differently to make the speech more effective?
I should have used hand gestures to make my speech more conveyable. I will have to try practicing in front of someone to get used to an audience which will help not to forget my words. I could use a louder voice and put more enthusiasm into the tone.
● What did you like about the presentation?
I liked the organization of the speech and I believe the content was easy to understand. The anecdote of my experience when I was little helped in making the presentation interesting. I also liked the quote of John F. Kennedy, I think it was closely related to the whole topic of my speech.